Katey Bright

Comments

[giselle murillo]

interesting how you changed the location and the setting. but it works very well. this story was so vivid with detail, and you were able to paint the same picture verbally. and the ending was still in tact with the killing, emotions leading up to it, and so forth. i found the script easier to read than the story, so job well done. only one negative thing, a little too gory for my taste though.

[R. Ian MacLeod]

I think you really explored the strange world of Cortazar and his writing.

I thought the love triangle you were building seemed to work well. I was continually trying to figure out who she was with. Couldn't always tell, which made it interesting.

I found the sculpture thing to be intriguing and was a little freaked out when he started drooling and waving an axe. Its clearly a horror-genre flick which I find interesting.

I think it would have been cool to hear the background on the idol and the scary back story earlier in the story, instead of in the climax. Other than that, fun to read.

[michael freund]

katey, your writing is lucid and succinct. you never over oder underdo descriptions or dialogue, and i can always 'hear' in addition to 'see' what you write.

i like not knowing exactly what's going on in terms of the triangle relationship; i mean we don't in the story, either, as far as i can tell. you kept the horrific denouement of the killing, which to me is startling. maybe because i am jetlagged or reading comprehension-challenged or have a head cold - at any rate, all of a sudden we are faced with the axe self-defense murder. i wonder whether an adaptation could show more of how samuel gets into his sacrificial mood. can we have some flutes before he wields his axe to show his inner state?

your story is definitely more fun to read than the original short; sentences a half page long are too long even for this european philosopher.

i think you succeeded in translating the exotic mood of magical realism into action and dialogue, somehow it works. i wonder how the dorm/student setting works with the oddness of the story. it's definitely a surprise. thanks at any rate for not showing mason licking the axe in the last scene.

[Kelley Micuda]

I thought your adaptation was extremely well done. The changes were all driven to better serve your script and your characters. The fact they are younger and college students and a setting of Chicago.These all added to forming a new spin and feeling. The short story is also a bit of a effort to follow, whereas the script is clear and visual. Using the idol from the short story in the script, works as a nice extra layer and motivation to the usual axe-murder thriller. Well done.

[Jennava Laska]

Katey, you totally creep me out... but in a good way. You have put tons of thought into this script. Please keep working on it, I think you really have something here.

I totally dig the fact that you put the story in a location that is close to you. I think it makes the story more real, and I think it helps give another creepy quality that only Chicago can give.

Make sure that you read the dialogue out loud. I found a couple lines to be campy.

I think this is really fun, and while I would totally freak out watching this movie, I know I would have a great time.

[john]

raleigh